Board Thread:General Discussion/@comment-69.119.51.216-20130526173033/@comment-5404027-20130802152307

I have to agree with the huge text part. I read this, and it is quite interesting, but once I got to around chapter 6, the huge walls of text started to give me a headache. Also, I think the story is a bit... Chaotic. What I mean is, it's all good up until when Anraki arrives. Then it just jumps form one thing to the next, and doesn't bother to explain itself, creating a huge mess in my head. Note that not everyone reads manga, because that's obviously what you were inspired by, and we might not know the story you were based on. Don't take this as offensive, apart form that the story is actually pretty interesitng.